This it Chapter one "Food for a Week"
This is the first chapter in a story that I'm actually writing for my girl. It stars a heroine as I picture it in the harsh reality of Gama world. Unfortunately this is the second time I am submitting this, this is because I forgot the notes/general info piece. If you like this and want to read more about my heroine and her life please leave a little note or comment. And I would be REALLY flatterd if someone rates my story! Also I hope it's not to gory. I did edit out all the cursing thoe.
PS: This is not copy writed but I would really like recognition if you use this for personal use.
Thenlar, rating: 76 March 11, 2002
It's okay. But really short. A lot is unexplained,
so we don't know a lot of what's going on. For
instance, "he". I realize this is probably
intentional (or maybe I'm just dense), but still,
it limits our understanding of the story. But
keep 'em coming, as you put more up, hopefully
we'll understand more of it.
One other thing. If she's really that focused
on survival, would she *really* have sacrificed
her rifle like that? I understand she now has a
lot of food, but what happens when it runs out
eventually? I hope she can fix it.
Ozzerith, rating: - March 11, 2002
Well alright I know you don't know anything about anyone so far, and yes I ententionally want you to wonder about "him". I respect and enjoy your imput on this...
So with chocolate coverd coffee beans and misc. crackachinos, and whackachinos, and what not I will be writing, "The Long Road Home", and "Him", the next two chapters, probly over the next weak or two. And I PROMISE they will me longer.
And lastly, Does anyone have a problem with me posting this chapter by chapter? I'd like your input on this.
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Etok, rating: 82 March 12, 2002
good, good. but i wouldn't reccomend putting it up chapter by chapter
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